Asmanticans

Name:
Homeworld:Moria
Appearance:Very big
Culture:They are animals they hunt alone
Technology:none
History: They have done nothing but to live on moria and never seen anything other than the native species
Present; Struggeling with a virus called X-Omo which makes them very big even bigger than usal in about one day and makes them very mad and not even controlable like a parasite
Number:About 200.000

This application needs a little bit of work Exo. Then maybe it can be accepted. First off, the name needs to be in the application even if it is the title, it's a formality really. Secondly, please add more on the appearance. I see there is a picture on the bottom of the application, however, we still need a description of the alien to get a better look of it. It would help us understand the character better. Thirdly, the culture section in your application. I feel like it needs a bit more of an explanation. Why do they hunt alone? What are some weird customs they do in group and so on. (Anything to give us more of an inside.) History is a big section of importance on here. The history of these aliens helps us to see if they fit the guidelines of the site, so please give us more information on the history. Just doing nothing doesn't tell us much. Try to get more into it. Tell us maybe about some wars they had with others or something. I just need to see a bit more into their past. Finally, the present section on here. You don't get much into that either. That and the sentence is a bit of a run on sentence. Grammar is important in applications. So please try to just give us more information on all of this application. Then hopefully your alien can be accepted and you can start using it real soon. Also, one thing I would like you to look at is this format of a good application. Just to make sure you have everything and it all matches. I'll put a link in on the bottom for you to check it. Once all these problems are fixed, we'll (Poetica and I) will have another look at your application.


Here is the format of a good application just to check yours (it's mainly to back up my statements of what I said. ^-^ Other than that, it was an interesting alien.) https://dwrpplay.rpg-board.net/t241-good-applications-should-have

please move this to the receclye bin!